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[aid] => mick
[title] => Evening Tides
[time] => 2005-07-05 22:01:53
[hometext] => On a day I wish could've lasted forever..
[bodytext] => Some distant shore
draws upon my gaze
beyond the evening tides..
my eyes locked
on some point
known only to me.
It could be
tomorrows or yesterdays
that keep me company
there, at the waters edge..
a promise of what may be
or regret of what wasn't.
I know It'll bring no comfort,
but I reach for you anyway-
only to hear your name
fall but once
from my lips..
a whisper lost..
instantly,
in the roar of the surf.
With deft weight,
reality and responsibility
break me..
falling on my shoulders,
my cross to bare.
I am not to be a savior.
I sunk further as I swam in the dark
in the memory of you.
Pale shadows
cast at my feet
and I drift there..
in and out
amongst the tide,
robbed of my heart
in the ebb and flow.
In time, the tide will recede
and I'll be left with only
my voice..
my love~
waiting..
for your return.
B
[comments] => 18
[counter] => 251
[topic] => 48
[informant] => Man_On_High
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[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
)
Evening Tides
Contributed by
Man_On_High
on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:01:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Some distant shore
draws upon my gaze
beyond the evening tides..
my eyes locked
on some point
known only to me.
It could be
tomorrows or yesterdays
that keep me company
there, at the waters edge..
a promise of what may be
or regret of what wasn't.
I know It'll bring no comfort,
but I reach for you anyway-
only to hear your name
fall but once
from my lips..
a whisper lost..
instantly,
in the roar of the surf.
With deft weight,
reality and responsibility
break me..
falling on my shoulders,
my cross to bare.
I am not to be a savior.
I sunk further as I swam in the dark
in the memory of you.
Pale shadows
cast at my feet
and I drift there..
in and out
amongst the tide,
robbed of my heart
in the ebb and flow.
In time, the tide will recede
and I'll be left with only
my voice..
my love~
waiting..
for your return.
B
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Re: Evening Tides
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:05:24 PM AEST
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ohhhhhhhh this just moved me so very beautiful
Michelle |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by jyssvw22 on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:06:00 PM AEST
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let me be the first to say thank you
this was a vivid and imaginitive piece
i think we have all been there once or twice before..
simply well done |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:09:35 PM AEST
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Sigh....such a heartfelt write...
Quite a sad picture you have painted here.... a vivid one none the less...
"a promise of what may be
or regret of what wasn't."
To me, this sums up everything...
J |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:11:10 PM AEST
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Beautiful Billy!!!
Ur words always steal me away. I could sense the longing and grief in this poem and can relate to your sad feelings.
My heart is still in wait for someone too...
Magnificent, this is one of my faves!
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Re: Evening Tides
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:13:12 PM AEST
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Sounds like she is gone and sadness weighs deeply upon you. Then why would you want the day to last forever? I am missing something here. Sorry Billy, but I honestly do not understand.
Rita |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:15:09 PM AEST
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man, what a geat one. alhough i'm not suprised...i've come to expect that from you (many years ago, that is).
you've told me of late about this day and how much you enjoyed it...i see why now.
great poem, bro
wizard |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by lostrelic on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 10:39:40 PM AEST
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| nice vision almost heard the tide great piece |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 01:03:53 AM AEST
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Talented Billy does it again. Although this is a sad write, I enjoyed reading it word for word. You know exactly how to captivate the reader with ur unique style of writing. You paint a vivid picture for all to view. 5 big stars from me
hugs,
Dreamer |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by gwenevere on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 02:15:50 AM AEST
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| This is a most exquisite write.Keep them coming,Ros |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 10:32:56 AM AEST
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A touching and reaching out kind of feeling i
get from this, along with the mysterious
feeling that presents it self when u sit by the
ocean, it can be your friend and foe at the
same time, i definately can relate to this
sentiment, splendid peice of writting once
again . . .
Ben |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by sweetangeluk on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 12:44:39 PM AEST
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Maybes or not.
Loved the way you expressed yourself in this write.
Awesome
Love Angelxxx
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Re: Evening Tides
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by nanb294eva on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:41:48 PM AEST
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I KINDA DON'T UNDERSTAND THAT ONE EITHER. BUT THINK I HAVE RETURNED
LOVE YOU NANCY
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Re: Evening Tides
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by CarolinaBlue on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 01:56:23 AM AEST
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Wow Billy this was beautifully sad! The second to last stanza just pierced my heart and the ending just left me with deep longing. terrific job yet again!
~Blue~ |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 03:43:52 PM AEST
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Wow, that's very good! i liked the imagery i saw in reading what you wrote.. i saw many shades of blue. but that's just me.. it's an incredible piece
thanks very much for sharing it!
dw |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 06:55:59 AM AEST
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you I can say are a great poet
your words flow prefect from start to end
if 10 was aloud it would be yours
but you will have to settle with a 5 |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by brew on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 06:26:22 PM AEST
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wow, what a beautiful piture painted in the mind.......you always do write, such heart filled writes.
Brew~ |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 01:56:06 PM AEST
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Unfortunately we can't keep any moment
forever, but water serves as an excellent
metaphor for describing loss. Nice write. |
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Re: Evening Tides
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st January 2007 @ 07:09:07 PM AEST
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Gentle Billy,
There is something melancholic, yet so beautiful in this.
The metaphor, I think has me at a dreadful loss. How
beautifully painful to be trapped in a memory, so sweet
and yet all too painful at once .. sinking in the dark
There is a certain solace in both the water and the
memory. I began to quote, but realized, this piece,
in it's entirety, is what I found truly captivating.
Completely brilliant, babe.
~Breezy
♥♥
xoxox |
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