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[aid] => mick
[title] => Skeletal Remains
[time] => 2005-07-01 14:53:02
[hometext] => A very rough piece...but it suits the mood and the moment
[bodytext] => The past is a nice place to visit; but not to stay
dwell with ghosts too long, and your mind may fray
You can't benefit from mistakes you haven't made
nothing would be learned if we all obeyed
Too bad some of the lessons are so damn rough!!
Sometimes we lick our wounds, and the message we rebuff
Stuck in a daydream; another time and place
wishing I could revert to before I was a disgrace
Now let's take it back to the start
where love and happiness depart
"Happy Anniversary!" he says---another slap in the face
I hate what you're not! You're such a disgrace
A perfect paradox---or don't you see?
Is how this delusional rhyme came to be...
This love left long ago, but why didn't YOU?
How many loveless years? It's been a few...
I'm gonna wake up this anger that's seething inside
confront my resentment I've been striving to hide
Not listening to another lie you try to say
my spirit still kicks...I'll have to die another day.
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 382
[topic] => 65
[informant] => hauntedscorp
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[score] => 54
[ratings] => 12
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Skeletal Remains
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 02:53:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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The past is a nice place to visit; but not to stay
dwell with ghosts too long, and your mind may fray
You can't benefit from mistakes you haven't made
nothing would be learned if we all obeyed
Too bad some of the lessons are so damn rough!!
Sometimes we lick our wounds, and the message we rebuff
Stuck in a daydream; another time and place
wishing I could revert to before I was a disgrace
Now let's take it back to the start
where love and happiness depart
"Happy Anniversary!" he says---another slap in the face
I hate what you're not! You're such a disgrace
A perfect paradox---or don't you see?
Is how this delusional rhyme came to be...
This love left long ago, but why didn't YOU?
How many loveless years? It's been a few...
I'm gonna wake up this anger that's seething inside
confront my resentment I've been striving to hide
Not listening to another lie you try to say
my spirit still kicks...I'll have to die another day.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-07-01 14:53:02]
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 07:31:26 PM AEST
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stay strong and positive..you know thats what i am all about!!!!
lol
nice write dork
i mean scorp |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 07:32:40 PM AEST
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Well Scorp a very well written piece u have here. I love ur work it's always intriguing and has the reader thinking about what ure really saying within ur poem. Keep em coming!
hugs,
dreamer |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 07:54:05 PM AEST
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nice write i like keep writing and i keep reading love your stuff cant get enough
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 01:33:37 AM AEST
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Wow, Scorp! Such strong raw emotion...building on strengths instead of weakness!!!! Awesome write. "my spirit still kicks...I'll have to die another day." Oh yeah!!! :)
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 08:46:45 AM AEST
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I am glad that I have read carefully, enough, to have viewed the lessons here.
I like the notion of the 'perfect paradox'---paradoxical witihn itself...perfection simply does not exist.
Yet this poem is quite close to it!
Awesome work Scorp :) |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 01:41:10 PM AEST
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Ooo... I like this one too. : ) You are a great writer... this one speaks out a lot to me. It strong, and I like the message that was sent. It's positive... and more people should think like this, or that's how I feel.
Jodi |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 05:03:07 PM AEST
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Man..I LOVE this stanza Scorp:
"You can't benefit from mistakes you haven't made
nothing would be learned if we all obeyed
Too bad some of the lessons are so damn rough!!
Sometimes we lick our wounds, and the message we rebuff"
The freakin' honesty...
This write gave me 'a cackle of geese'- bumps..lol
Stand strong girl..
(your soul poured onto paper...this write)
Thoughts and Prayers..
B
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by Dorkfish on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 12:18:46 PM AEST
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| Hey great job Scorp. Another brilliant piece. |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by freckle on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 09:04:53 PM AEST
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Deep Skorp. It is no fun to be there when the love is gone. Been there too many times. Thankfully, there is a tomorrow and a future away from the past...or at least as far away as you can get.
Good write.
Carol |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by secretwind on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 12:00:44 PM AEST
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I feel ya on this one
well done |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Monday, 1st December 2014 @ 06:37:12 AM AEST
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Stuck in a daydream; another time and place
wishing I could revert to before I was a disgrace
I am always amazed at how clearly you say the things I feel inside. It endears you to me. I feel like we have soo much in common your thought processes and topic choices....this is another example of why you are such a great poet. Also I am going to do a series over the nine muses, just so you know, lol. I missed you this weekend, hope all is well. |
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Re: Skeletal Remains
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by JamesStockdale on
Thursday, 17th September 2020 @ 06:24:36 PM AEST
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I/'/m glad I visited the past.
You don/'/t see writing like this anymore on
YPDC.
I should read more of your goodies.
No bs. From me.... This was fantastic. |
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