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As you look down at me.
My arms are getting tired
My body is getting heavy
Any minute I am going under
Drowning in my deep sea of pain and tears.
And still you stand above me
Looking down with evil flickering within your eyes.
Compressing your laughter,
Compressing you happiness to my misery.
In your hands you hold my life preserver,
The power to help,
The power to save,
But instead
You tell me to work harder,
And throw me a ball-and-chain.
I see that you're superior
your eyes will never let me forget,
And you continue to hate me,
Worry I'll take it all away
Worry I'll take your spot that you so fully-fill.
So you plan your scheme
Pretend to care, pretned to love
All the time with your fingers crossed
Waitting for my failure.
As I go under,
I see you,
Your big grin spread across your face.
As a tear rolls down your cheek,
You realize you held the power
The oppertunity to throw me my break
And pull me to safty.
You throw it down into my hand sewn sea,
But its too late.
You smile,
For you have won.
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The war you could have lost.

Contributed by mystical_illusion on Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 06:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic: AngryPoetry

You smile,
As you look down at me.
My arms are getting tired
My body is getting heavy
Any minute I am going under
Drowning in my deep sea of pain and tears.
And still you stand above me
Looking down with evil flickering within your eyes.
Compressing your laughter,
Compressing you happiness to my misery.
In your hands you hold my life preserver,
The power to help,
The power to save,
But instead
You tell me to work harder,
And throw me a ball-and-chain.
I see that you're superior
your eyes will never let me forget,
And you continue to hate me,
Worry I'll take it all away
Worry I'll take your spot that you so fully-fill.
So you plan your scheme
Pretend to care, pretned to love
All the time with your fingers crossed
Waitting for my failure.
As I go under,
I see you,
Your big grin spread across your face.
As a tear rolls down your cheek,
You realize you held the power
The oppertunity to throw me my break
And pull me to safty.
You throw it down into my hand sewn sea,
But its too late.
You smile,
For you have won.

Copyright © mystical_illusion ... [ 2003-01-06 18:00:00]
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Re: The war you could have lost. (User Rating: 1 )
by Ilhar on Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 06:45:00 PM AEST
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i am not sure if i understand but i found it fascinating.

Re: The war you could have lost. (User Rating: 1 )
by roisin on Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 11:33:59 PM AEST
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hey, I had a "friend" like that once myself.....the pain of the situation nearly ate me up...forgiveness a great healer...a great write ..thank you

Re: The war you could have lost. (User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 02:55:25 PM AEST
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'Drowning in my deep sea of pain and tears.' I loved that line it spoke a lot to me and sounds a lot like me. This was really good I can assure you I'll be looking for more of your stuff.

Bobo (Joel)

Re: The war you could have lost. (User Rating: 1 )
by GEQUETSCHT on Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 06:24:50 PM AEST
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For most of my life this is how have felt (and still do) about my mom, because she does this to me,...
This poem is amazing, and full of emotion and feeling, and thats what makes it beautiful

Mit Liebe und Umarmungen
Ali

Re: The war you could have lost. (User Rating: 1 )
by capergirl_23 on Sunday, 12th January 2003 @ 12:18:05 AM AEST
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Very compelling write! A nice poem about struggle & defeat. I liked how you worded it..I will look forward to reading more from you.
~Take Care
Keep Smilin' :)

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