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[aid] => Mick
[title] => Tourniquet
[time] => 2003-01-05 08:00:00
[hometext] => * Words can't say how I feel about this poem, but I'll do the best I can. Usually my poems are very easy to write they often just flow out of me. This poem however was VERY hard to write. This poem though is just dripping with hurt and honesty and I can truly say I am quite pleased with it. Since you are not me it might not make sense if u have any questions ask and I will try to answer them. I hope u enjoy and post a comment I like to know what everyone thinks.*
[bodytext] => I'm weeping on the floor
Abused and broken to my very core
I hear the same taunting voices
'Cut, burn, and tear' I shake my head, weakly
I'm staring off into nowhere
Because I've realized I no longer care
I'm like a dead leaf, about to fall,
But I can't just give in and be torn apart by death's decay
I die a little more each day
My mouth can't form the words I want to say
I see myself, in the distance, lying in a suicidal heap
I scream, rent my clothes because its to painful to watch
I've thought about a lot of things
Failed to fly away on these broken wings
I am like a desert, dry and thirsty
There is no hope here only desolation and weariness
I rub a hand over my saddened face
Trying to erase my tears and my look of disgrace
I try to lock in my aching heart,
But all I see is the razor and the scars it leaves
My face is bruised and streaked with dirt
To stop the blood I make a knot with this old shirt
Its stained with dried blood... Life is so hard
I put my head in my hands... Unable to stop
My shoulders start to heave and tears fall aching to the ground
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[counter] => 185
[topic] => 32
[informant] => bobotheclown
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[ratings] => 2
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Tourniquet
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 08:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I'm weeping on the floor
Abused and broken to my very core
I hear the same taunting voices
'Cut, burn, and tear' I shake my head, weakly
I'm staring off into nowhere
Because I've realized I no longer care
I'm like a dead leaf, about to fall,
But I can't just give in and be torn apart by death's decay
I die a little more each day
My mouth can't form the words I want to say
I see myself, in the distance, lying in a suicidal heap
I scream, rent my clothes because its to painful to watch
I've thought about a lot of things
Failed to fly away on these broken wings
I am like a desert, dry and thirsty
There is no hope here only desolation and weariness
I rub a hand over my saddened face
Trying to erase my tears and my look of disgrace
I try to lock in my aching heart,
But all I see is the razor and the scars it leaves
My face is bruised and streaked with dirt
To stop the blood I make a knot with this old shirt
Its stained with dried blood... Life is so hard
I put my head in my hands... Unable to stop
My shoulders start to heave and tears fall aching to the ground
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bobotheclown
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2003-01-05 08:00:00]
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Re: Tourniquet
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 09:00:24 AM AEST
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This is so sad.... my heart goes out to you Joel, no one should feel like that.... how brave you are to share.... keep writing, it heals...
~Dani~ |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by Ilhar on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 02:38:00 PM AEST
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you speak of your hurt very strongly we can feel your pain through your words.... just keep using this medium to vent ...you have a talent and I look forward to your next write..i believe in you
sharon |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by wyrd_faerie on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 03:48:10 PM AEST
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| oh joel...this poem...i don't have any words to describe how it made me feel...it made me cry, and no poem has ever done that to me in my life...oh...this is so sad, so true, so beautiful... |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by OreO on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 04:11:10 PM AEST
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And i thought the last poem i read was my favorite....i cant tell you how beautiful this poem is and how it touched my heart....it was very brave of you to share such a deep part of who you are with so many people, i thank you my friend, you have such a beautiful way with words, and even though you know you make me worry soooo much as you already know... lol...i still enjoy reading your poetry Joel you write about such a big part of my past so often and it really truly touches me.....your poetry takes me back in time my friend....
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:. |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by Chanti on
Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 08:56:10 PM AEST
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Wow..... This is sad, but so amazing. It feels as if i could have written this myself...Wow... it describes how i feel alot of the time.. Im glad i read it now because it gave me a little bit of strength in a hard time. Thx so much writing this talented piece of honesty.
-Chanti* |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 12:47:58 AM AEST
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| ((((Joel))) |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by mystical_illusion on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 05:49:31 PM AEST
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I loved you poem very much. I read it over a couple of times and each time I liked it more. Whether it means the same things that it means to you i do not know, but this poem I can relate to so much. Reading it has lifted my spirits thinking that Im not the only one going through what im going through... before i stop making sense im gonna go. thanx for writting
-kelly |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by frozensuicide on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 09:31:58 PM AEST
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| please dont die. you write so bewautifully and your so fun to talk to that it wouldnt be cool! im here if ya need me! |
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by Cancer on
Sunday, 26th January 2003 @ 10:24:02 PM AEST
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| that was amazing. anything else i could say wouldn't live up to this poem. amazing. |
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Re: Tourniquet
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by Jason_Robert_Britt on
Thursday, 7th August 2003 @ 05:56:11 AM AEST
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| Wow, Bobo... so intense, your passion for words really shines through here... there is a difference between a writter and a poet.... you definately prove yourself a poet with this one. |
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