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Array ( [sid] => 95896 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => trying [time] => 2005-05-26 20:54:34 [hometext] => this is about my amazing aunt; i wish i could have her back [bodytext] => trying to hold on to you
trying to keep my head above the water
trying to catch the breath that isnt there
trying to dry these tears
trying to bring you back to life,
but nothings coming in clear
you were sick, hurting deep inside
possibly losing your mind
i loved you, along with everyone else
i dont understand why you killed yourself
my tears now flow like the blood from your body
that night i lost my light
the one that gave me hope to reach the end
now theres more than just a desire,
theres fire, just burning to hold you, to help you
i want to go back in time, make you realize
that suicide is not a choice
i just wish that you could hear my voice
you died that night
you cried that night
you writhed in your own pain
so may you lie there in your grave
knowing how we all wished to save you [comments] => 5 [counter] => 167 [topic] => 32 [informant] => crazygirl [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 8 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => SadPoetry )

trying

Contributed by crazygirl on Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 08:54:34 PM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

trying to hold on to you
trying to keep my head above the water
trying to catch the breath that isnt there
trying to dry these tears
trying to bring you back to life,
but nothings coming in clear
you were sick, hurting deep inside
possibly losing your mind
i loved you, along with everyone else
i dont understand why you killed yourself
my tears now flow like the blood from your body
that night i lost my light
the one that gave me hope to reach the end
now theres more than just a desire,
theres fire, just burning to hold you, to help you
i want to go back in time, make you realize
that suicide is not a choice
i just wish that you could hear my voice
you died that night
you cried that night
you writhed in your own pain
so may you lie there in your grave
knowing how we all wished to save you

Copyright © crazygirl ... [ 2005-05-26 20:54:34]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: trying (User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 09:41:16 PM AEST
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This was a deeply intense write, and I'm sorry to hear about your Aunt, but I think it's good you wrote about your feelings....
Scorp.

Re: trying (User Rating: 1 )
by Kitty06 on Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 09:44:16 PM AEST
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Your poem is great, it flows well and portrays the mood and feeling of the peom wonderfully. I'm sorry that your aunt was taken away from you like that. You really get the message across that she was important to you. Try your best to get through this hard time and continue to express your emtions so strongly in your poetry.

Re: trying (User Rating: 1 )
by Fears on Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 10:32:10 PM AEST
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awww, i am really sorry about your loss but i liked your poem, it was verrrrryyyy well written. Keep posting!

~Fears

Re: trying (User Rating: 1 )
by Sinned on Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 07:26:24 AM AEST
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Crazygirl

You were blessed to have an Aunt such as her.
Thank God He has her in the palm of His hand

Sinned

Re: trying (User Rating: 1 )
by Sinned on Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 07:41:09 AM AEST
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Crazygirl

My condolences
I can see she was special.
God in His mercy will care for her.
Your poem is a nice tribute as to how much she ment to you.
Prayers your way.

Sinned

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