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With such a perfect life.
She’s athletic and smart
What could possibly go wrong in her life?
She has so many friends
She is nothing but smiles.
She can play basketball and volleyball
And in track she can run for miles.
“It’s so unfair” I say
“She must have a ‘lucky charm’
Her family is great too
Hey, whys that wristband on her arm?
I wish I had her life
Then everything would be perfect.
I would be happy, just like her.
My life wouldn’t be so wrecked.
How come she’s not at school today?
The teachers say she’s in the hospital.
She slit her wrists to kill herself,
Maybe her life isn’t so perfect after all.

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Perfect Girl

Contributed by brokengirl on Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 10:32:01 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

She’s just the perfect girl
With such a perfect life.
She’s athletic and smart
What could possibly go wrong in her life?
She has so many friends
She is nothing but smiles.
She can play basketball and volleyball
And in track she can run for miles.
“It’s so unfair” I say
“She must have a ‘lucky charm’
Her family is great too
Hey, whys that wristband on her arm?
I wish I had her life
Then everything would be perfect.
I would be happy, just like her.
My life wouldn’t be so wrecked.
How come she’s not at school today?
The teachers say she’s in the hospital.
She slit her wrists to kill herself,
Maybe her life isn’t so perfect after all.

Copyright Â© brokengirl ... [ 2005-04-06 22:32:01]
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Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by bigtig6269 on Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 11:55:38 PM AEST
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don't you just love it when people judge a book by its cover? great poem, but keep your spirits up. I believe you can do whatever you want to

Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 12:34:54 AM AEST
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Great write...It's true, we may think someone has it all until we walk in his or her shoes.

Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by In_a_while on Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 07:59:42 AM AEST
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wow, that was very dramatic and powerful. I've met a person like that, and that's how it was. Great write, and keep it up.

Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by LOWMAN613 on Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 11:17:40 AM AEST
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So much this happens but we never see the pain behind it! Great write! Christina

Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by blue_angel on Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 11:55:28 AM AEST
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i have to say that this is how people think of me as well. they think im so perfect, yet im really just the opposite of their assumptions. not only this but because they think so much of me i am expected to do so many things... its a problem many poeple have, judging others and such. i mean, its only human to be hypocritical but it is really unfair to those who are not what you make them up to be. i seem to be happy yet my fake smiles only lead to real tears... and more cutting. and wow sorry for the long comment wow you got me to monologue. well great write i love this poem 5 stars!

Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by Sonic_phoenix on Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 12:21:33 PM AEST
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strong message, but there is no such thing as perfect, just people who have to good and then loose it.
good write
jen

Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 01:58:47 PM AEST
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such a brilliant write. So ture are your words. people who sem to not have acare in the world, sometimes are the ones who have the most emotional struggles
pix xx

Re: Perfect Girl (User Rating: 1 )
by Wachumiri on Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 03:24:25 AM AEST
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Ow! This one hurt to read. I'm sorry. I wish I knew what you felt, so I'd know the words to say. To many times we judge on what the outside says, when the real person cries within.
Take care...
David

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