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you hurt me so bad
I guess we just weren't ment to be
but sometimes I'm still sad

I guess I wasn't good enough
I couldn't satisfy your every need
and after everything I gave you
in the end you'd still leave

I disliked you so much
for putting me through that
at one time I loved you
now I think you're fat

you left me for her
and it hurt to see you two
but you deserve each other
because she cheats on you too

still sometimes i think
it might be true
you have to loose something good
to get something better

one day you'll look back
and realize what you did
but you'll shake it off
and say "I was just a kid"

you were my first love
and never will I forget
I thought you came from up above
but now i can not frett

I will find my prince charming
and we will run off together
and forever you'll be behind me
I'll be done with you, altogether [comments] => 4 [counter] => 268 [topic] => 22 [informant] => breny [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 4 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LostLove )

Altogether

Contributed by breny on Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 06:40:37 PM in AEST
Topic: LostLove

I can't believe you'd cheat on me
you hurt me so bad
I guess we just weren't ment to be
but sometimes I'm still sad

I guess I wasn't good enough
I couldn't satisfy your every need
and after everything I gave you
in the end you'd still leave

I disliked you so much
for putting me through that
at one time I loved you
now I think you're fat

you left me for her
and it hurt to see you two
but you deserve each other
because she cheats on you too

still sometimes i think
it might be true
you have to loose something good
to get something better

one day you'll look back
and realize what you did
but you'll shake it off
and say "I was just a kid"

you were my first love
and never will I forget
I thought you came from up above
but now i can not frett

I will find my prince charming
and we will run off together
and forever you'll be behind me
I'll be done with you, altogether

Copyright © breny ... [ 2004-12-30 18:40:37]
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Re: Altogether (User Rating: 1 )
by O7NeVeS on Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 08:21:53 PM AEST
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I really enjoyed this poem, it reminds me of my first love, except I still am not over him. Good luck and i'm glad u were able to move on. TD

Re: Altogether (User Rating: 1 )
by Sweetheart on Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 09:36:02 PM AEST
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This relates to me since I'm trying to move on from my first love. I guess first loves really do hurt the worst. And you are right if he cheated on you hes not worth it. You will find that somebody..just be patient. Good luck and great poem.

Re: Altogether (User Rating: 1 )
by weezer21 on Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 02:00:06 PM AEST
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i read this poem because you commented on one of my poems that describes an ex too...this is a great poem i'm glad i read it...and i can totally relate...he sounds like an ass..good thing to write about

-x jessi x-

Re: Altogether (User Rating: 1 )
by DorianChambers on Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 05:32:15 PM AEST
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u don't know it brenny but u have met your prince cahrming, thats called first love, one day u shall meet your mr. right, thats called ever lasting love, u
r an excellent writer, your poems have a verry nice
flow 2 them as a peice of music would pocess in
it's rhythum contex . . .

Dorian Chambers

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