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[aid] => mick
[title] => I Once Was
[time] => 2004-12-10 10:13:25
[hometext] => Alot of things....
[bodytext] => I once was a very naughty child,
Who loved being mischievous & wild,
Who got the slipper a few times of my mum,
I laughed as she slapped a flip flop across my bum.
Quite an obnoxious little cow,
To be nice I didn’t know how,
I’d walk around think I knew it all,
Too ignorant to see pride comes before a fall.
A messed up, drunk young girl,
Who hated the whole entire world,
She lashed out & hid her feelings,
Didn’t think there was anything wrong with stealing.
A violent & aggressive young woman who was a mess,
Sometimes too drunk to even get undressed,
Wandering around is a state of drunken fantasy
Was too scared to even face up to reality.
A woman who self harmed & shouted abuse,
Who didn’t know where she was, really confused,
Hurt others before they could hurt her,
Everything in her life was just a drunken blur.
A weak person who rolled over to troubles,
Hit the pubs & hide in the vodka doubles,
But that was me last week & yesterday,
In becoming stronger I have come quite a long way.
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[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 29
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => SadPoetry
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I Once Was
Contributed by
pixie
on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:13:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I once was a very naughty child,
Who loved being mischievous & wild,
Who got the slipper a few times of my mum,
I laughed as she slapped a flip flop across my bum.
Quite an obnoxious little cow,
To be nice I didn’t know how,
I’d walk around think I knew it all,
Too ignorant to see pride comes before a fall.
A messed up, drunk young girl,
Who hated the whole entire world,
She lashed out & hid her feelings,
Didn’t think there was anything wrong with stealing.
A violent & aggressive young woman who was a mess,
Sometimes too drunk to even get undressed,
Wandering around is a state of drunken fantasy
Was too scared to even face up to reality.
A woman who self harmed & shouted abuse,
Who didn’t know where she was, really confused,
Hurt others before they could hurt her,
Everything in her life was just a drunken blur.
A weak person who rolled over to troubles,
Hit the pubs & hide in the vodka doubles,
But that was me last week & yesterday,
In becoming stronger I have come quite a long way.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2004-12-10 10:13:25]
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Re: I Once Was
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:20:14 AM AEST
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I think I was that and more...Pix Im not who I led oyu to believe I was...but alot of what you said in this poem barring the female lol I am a male of that I know...is lie my past in great detail...but here and now I lied and am a lier have always been so...such a sad person I have become...therapy I will pass on I will just forget about eveyone and this site as I know they will do the same for me....sorry for the agony and me.
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Re: I Once Was
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by LEMMEN on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:31:21 AM AEST
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Glad your doing better. Wish I could say the same,. But life gose on and I'm happy
~DENNIS~ |
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Re: I Once Was
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by autumngreeneyes on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:36:28 AM AEST
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| great poem Pix..I hate puking so one bad go round with gin and that did it for me..my failure is men..but I think I can say..I'm over that now. lol.. trouble is..I hate them all but they're not all bad..I just have to keep the drawbridge up now..sigh. like being in AA.. Hello.. my name is Mary and I'm a man-a-haulic..rotl... |
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Re: I Once Was
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by LoVeLy_4_StEvE on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 12:02:19 PM AEST
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I Love all of your poertry, they all hit home for me. This is one of the bests that I have read lately, you inspire me. I hope you keep doing better. You have a true and wonderful talent here. I love your work.
Hugs and Stuff
*Britnee* |
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Re: I Once Was
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by Broken_Skin on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 12:59:21 PM AEST
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Amazing!! Bloody ace!
Well done Pix, thats one to be really proud of.
lv BS x x x |
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Re: I Once Was
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 01:15:43 PM AEST
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Had to stop here before going... and glad I did! You sound alot like meeeeeee!!!!
Well portrayed picture! (((((pixie)))))
Angel always.........joni |
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Re: I Once Was
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 10:54:55 PM AEST
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| So honest, so true...... I cannot believe I was once like you..... I felt every word... the only exception is me being a guy..... Amazing poem!! |
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Re: I Once Was
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by emystar on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 06:58:57 AM AEST
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U go girl!
Awesome write.
This write shows me much wisdom.
keep up the great writing.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: I Once Was
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by secretwind on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 10:42:33 AM AEST
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A real reflection such as this
should hit home to a whole
lot of people.
Well done. |
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Re: I Once Was
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by wray on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 07:09:12 PM AEST
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| Aw why is this sad poetry? It's great how you can look at your past exactly as it is - in the past. Thanks for summing up what so many young people are still doing with themselves - shows us that there's still light at the end of the tunnel =) |
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Re: I Once Was
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by Archie on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 06:02:53 PM AEST
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| great poem! I am glad that you are overcoming your problems. It shows in your writing. |
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