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Array ( [sid] => 61649 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Maybe Death [time] => 2004-08-28 01:12:11 [hometext] => 'This is one of my favorites... it's about someones internal battle between life and death' [bodytext] => I once fought a battle between life and death,
The pain cut deeper with every breath,
Tears and heartache was all that could be seen,
What now is destruction once was serene.

Day after day the war raged on,
An internal battle with a trecherous song,
The war drums sounded with my beating heart,
Life and death is a world apart.

A battle was fought and life has lost,
Now my army will pay the cost,
So come tomorrow with the rising sun,
my world will cry at what i've become.

My battle wounds are deep and fresh,
My inner feelings always supressed,
Constantly thinking deeply about,
If maybe death is the only way out.

Now everything i see is in black and white,
Disgust is all that fills my sight,
Death is brought with every shout,
My war cries echo..all thoughout..

PAIN RULES MY WORLD, MAYBE DEATH IS THE ONLY WAY OUT [comments] => 4 [counter] => 167 [topic] => 36 [informant] => Darkloatus [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 13 [ratings] => 3 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Suicide )

Maybe Death

Contributed by Darkloatus on Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 01:12:11 AM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

I once fought a battle between life and death,
The pain cut deeper with every breath,
Tears and heartache was all that could be seen,
What now is destruction once was serene.

Day after day the war raged on,
An internal battle with a trecherous song,
The war drums sounded with my beating heart,
Life and death is a world apart.

A battle was fought and life has lost,
Now my army will pay the cost,
So come tomorrow with the rising sun,
my world will cry at what i've become.

My battle wounds are deep and fresh,
My inner feelings always supressed,
Constantly thinking deeply about,
If maybe death is the only way out.

Now everything i see is in black and white,
Disgust is all that fills my sight,
Death is brought with every shout,
My war cries echo..all thoughout..

PAIN RULES MY WORLD, MAYBE DEATH IS THE ONLY WAY OUT

Copyright © Darkloatus ... [ 2004-08-28 01:12:11]
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Re: Maybe Death (User Rating: 1 )
by AdamChantell on Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 01:23:07 AM AEST
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i will agree with you this is great. i like the visual in this. very great write.

Re: Maybe Death (User Rating: 1 )
by TheRaven on Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 02:07:24 AM AEST
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very sad, but great job. very visual, almost disturbing, knowing that many people feel like this. keep your chin up, and keep the great writing coming....
the raven

Re: Maybe Death (User Rating: 1 )
by Willofree on Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 07:09:41 AM AEST
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The poem moved me, I felt it was quite powerful. Our pain is so often viewed as our enemy and so we dread it so, yet it lets us know we are alive inside. Pain can be a motivator for change. When I have felt pain or grief, it felt like the surf. It would rush in and engulf you and then subside; and this pattern would repeat until the seas would calm.

Inspiring poem, Willofree

Re: Maybe Death (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 10:17:57 PM AEST
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...or maybe not...

great write, well woven words, warm welcome to ypdc, hugs n' love nessa

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