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[aid] => mick
[title] => Watermelon Days Wishes
[time] => 2004-08-12 18:42:03
[hometext] => A bit of wistfulness, a bit of nostalgia, a bit of sadness . . . many thanks to Phil for her help and for being a general soundingboard^^.
[bodytext] => please somebody paint me a picture
of those watermelon days
with vivid shades of green
for the smooth rind
and swift brushstrokes
painting in the soft red hues
of my particular slice
and naive blue skies overhead
but no snapshot could capture it all
so please, if you can, find a way to add
the feel of that sticky juice
that trickles down your face
and runs in rivulets between your fingers
and that fruity, fragrant scent
you can almost taste
and the sweetness of juicy perfection
that tastes like innocence and optimism
and the way that hot concrete sidewalk
feels beneath you
and the warmth of the beaming sun o'erhead
and the sound of your laughter
for no reason at all
and then, if you don't mind,
please wrap it all up in pretty paper
put a bow on it
and set it on my doorstep
eighty years from now.
(that is, of course,
assuming I can manage to stop myself
from asking for the package sooner--
like tomorrow, or today,
because I'm missing and needing
my watermelon days
more and more, lately . . .)
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[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Nostalgic
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Watermelon Days Wishes
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 06:42:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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please somebody paint me a picture
of those watermelon days
with vivid shades of green
for the smooth rind
and swift brushstrokes
painting in the soft red hues
of my particular slice
and naive blue skies overhead
but no snapshot could capture it all
so please, if you can, find a way to add
the feel of that sticky juice
that trickles down your face
and runs in rivulets between your fingers
and that fruity, fragrant scent
you can almost taste
and the sweetness of juicy perfection
that tastes like innocence and optimism
and the way that hot concrete sidewalk
feels beneath you
and the warmth of the beaming sun o'erhead
and the sound of your laughter
for no reason at all
and then, if you don't mind,
please wrap it all up in pretty paper
put a bow on it
and set it on my doorstep
eighty years from now.
(that is, of course,
assuming I can manage to stop myself
from asking for the package sooner--
like tomorrow, or today,
because I'm missing and needing
my watermelon days
more and more, lately . . .)
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-08-12 18:42:03]
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 06:58:27 PM AEST
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Oh hunni. You gotta know by now, i'm always here for you ok?
Its all my pleasure.
And i adore your poem.
And i know how you feel.
So, so sad.
I've already told you what else i think so i'll leave it at that.
Many hugs, Phil xxx
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 07:43:48 PM AEST
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In my experience, watermelon is so much better when shared with close friends ... when that package arrives ... be sure to invite someone over !!
You made my mouth water, dangit !! Now I gotta go get a melon. Another brilliant illustration of your talent. Thank you.
Naz ~ |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 08:28:28 PM AEST
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would that we could all capture that perfect moment, and have it to savor when we have otherwise forgotten. Wonderful bittersweet wistfulness.
Thanks for the write. |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by TheSchroedmeister on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 08:39:41 PM AEST
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| A really pleasant read |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by gery_giggles on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 08:47:26 PM AEST
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*wipes a tear*....great poem...brought back memories....
luv always |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 09:21:04 PM AEST
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I don't relate. But I do like watermelon. :D
Love always,
~ Dee |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 09:46:53 PM AEST
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I wish you many 'watermelon days' before you are 80! I love those melons and I love this poem. Brings back memories of glorious childhood.
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by Tanmaya on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 01:46:07 AM AEST
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This poem went straight to my heart.
I think you've done a wonderful job writing this... couldn't have been expressed better any other way. |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 04:49:02 AM AEST
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Colourful, sumptuous, vibrant and nostalgic.
Another lovely expression. Keep writing. |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by pixie on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 06:25:41 AM AEST
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a truly great write Nora *hugs you*
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by liquidsunshine on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 02:26:53 PM AEST
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This is a truly beautiful write. I've been there before, I think. I love the way you've worded this. You're a true poet, my dear.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 08:44:40 PM AEST
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I like this one a lot. The simplicity and purity of style and imagery conveys the message very well. But that's become a hallmark of your writing. I can relate to this entirely. Funny, though, I can't remember those days all that well.
beautiful piece of work here. Take care, friend who defies ravenous cannibalistic sheep.
Andrew |
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Re: Watermelon Days Wishes
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 08:58:05 PM AEST
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| Nora, I to wish to go back to my watermelon days. Thank you for the memories. *S* Cynthia |
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