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Array ( [sid] => 59866 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => deep sleep [time] => 2004-08-12 11:36:03 [hometext] => this is one of my earliest writes, i was about twelve i think, just after my moms 1st suicide attempt [bodytext] => Lying in my bed
Just thinking about my day
No one seems to care
That tonight I’m going away
To a better place
Where I can get my sleep
In a great big bed
Sleeping soundly, sleeping deep
Life’s become such a mess
Too much pressure, too much stress
I need to get out of here
Stop battling my mirror
Hurt and confused
Lost and abused
What can I do?
Something gleams in the light
I’ve lost the fight
Knife to my chest
Soon I will rest
Can’t wait to die
Seems like I should cry, but I can’t
Don’t know why
I feel good, but kind of bad
I’m so happy, but a little sad
I don’t know what to do
Just keep thinking about you
And how we’ll finally be together
But this time forever
When you left me I died inside
And in no one could I confide
So really I’ve been gone for quite a while
Not one tear nor one smile
Since the day I lost you
I haven’t been living
Just passing through
But now it’s all gonna be okay
And I won’t have to wait till someday
Here I go, here goes me
I’ll count to three
I left a note, saying I was sorry
Said I’d miss them all
When their time comes, to give me a call
One…Two…Three
The monitor goes dead
Things rushing through my head
Then I signed that note with blood dripping from my wrists,
A broken heart and a single kiss
Goodbye.
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deep sleep

Contributed by darkplaidbabe on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 11:36:03 AM in AEST
Topic: Suicide



Lying in my bed
Just thinking about my day
No one seems to care
That tonight I’m going away
To a better place
Where I can get my sleep
In a great big bed
Sleeping soundly, sleeping deep
Life’s become such a mess
Too much pressure, too much stress
I need to get out of here
Stop battling my mirror
Hurt and confused
Lost and abused
What can I do?
Something gleams in the light
I’ve lost the fight
Knife to my chest
Soon I will rest
Can’t wait to die
Seems like I should cry, but I can’t
Don’t know why
I feel good, but kind of bad
I’m so happy, but a little sad
I don’t know what to do
Just keep thinking about you
And how we’ll finally be together
But this time forever
When you left me I died inside
And in no one could I confide
So really I’ve been gone for quite a while
Not one tear nor one smile
Since the day I lost you
I haven’t been living
Just passing through
But now it’s all gonna be okay
And I won’t have to wait till someday
Here I go, here goes me
I’ll count to three
I left a note, saying I was sorry
Said I’d miss them all
When their time comes, to give me a call
One…Two…Three
The monitor goes dead
Things rushing through my head
Then I signed that note with blood dripping from my wrists,
A broken heart and a single kiss
Goodbye.




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Re: deep sleep (User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 11:42:04 AM AEST
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a very dark and deep write for a 12 year old, a very tragic and pained write,

takecare
pixie xx


Re: deep sleep (User Rating: 1 )
by CaddishCut on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 11:42:52 AM AEST
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Absolutely awe inspiring. Heart felt, and great rhythm!


Re: deep sleep (User Rating: 1 )
by faffeee on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 11:50:42 AM AEST
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*****. sorry for the language, its just that was really powerful. an amazing write, especially if you were only 12!!! its just sad that such pain is the cause for beautiful poetry. take care xxx


Re: deep sleep (User Rating: 1 )
by Alina on Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 02:12:57 PM AEST
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Brynna,
Hay girl, I had no idea. My mom has tried it too.. and I've seen her dead and revived. I'll send you a message -ok- chicka. Take Care. GREAT but SAD...
ALINA


Re: deep sleep (User Rating: 1 )
by dartsofplsre87 on Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 04:04:57 AM AEST
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This is really sad but really well written...i hope you got better




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