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[aid] => mick
[title] => Pool of Apathy
[time] => 2004-06-22 15:05:28
[hometext] => * heeeee yeah this took a long time to write I hope you enjoy it... or w/e. *
[bodytext] => As my blood coagulates in my veins
I drown in my pool of Apathy
And sip at this nothingness
As you hunt me like an animal
And strip me of all dignity
Cowed and hunted - eyes blank
As my broken arms trail behind me
And these tears, my last flimsy defense,
Water the shadows of my guilt
And the loneliness that continually
Leaves me bowed, beaten, and unwilling to raise my head
And as Apathy laughs at my failures
Drowning me as its detached face
Stares at me with no shadow of emotion
Just a robotic stare that probes my faults
As I slowly, but surely drown in my pool of Apathy
And scream as the inevitable black void closes in
I can't believe I've fallen this low
And watch, passivity making me blind
As Apathy steals my senses - so effortless
Crawling in this barren hinterland
Spawned from depression and my demons
And built upon the platform of decay and disgust
Lonely tears (fears) that carve my cheeks into bloody canyons
The only indication that I still live
(Despite wishing and praying otherwise),
But lacking the will and effort
I can only watch as I decay
And drown apathetic and depressed
So hollow as I inflict damage upon myself
My deadened stare broken by a brief smile
As my skin parts, upon my command,
And the Red Sea filling the gap
As Apathy laughs his job done (won)
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[counter] => 182
[topic] => 13
[informant] => bobotheclown
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[acomm] => 0
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[ratings] => 2
[editpoem] => 1
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Pool of Apathy
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:05:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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As my blood coagulates in my veins
I drown in my pool of Apathy
And sip at this nothingness
As you hunt me like an animal
And strip me of all dignity
Cowed and hunted - eyes blank
As my broken arms trail behind me
And these tears, my last flimsy defense,
Water the shadows of my guilt
And the loneliness that continually
Leaves me bowed, beaten, and unwilling to raise my head
And as Apathy laughs at my failures
Drowning me as its detached face
Stares at me with no shadow of emotion
Just a robotic stare that probes my faults
As I slowly, but surely drown in my pool of Apathy
And scream as the inevitable black void closes in
I can't believe I've fallen this low
And watch, passivity making me blind
As Apathy steals my senses - so effortless
Crawling in this barren hinterland
Spawned from depression and my demons
And built upon the platform of decay and disgust
Lonely tears (fears) that carve my cheeks into bloody canyons
The only indication that I still live
(Despite wishing and praying otherwise),
But lacking the will and effort
I can only watch as I decay
And drown apathetic and depressed
So hollow as I inflict damage upon myself
My deadened stare broken by a brief smile
As my skin parts, upon my command,
And the Red Sea filling the gap
As Apathy laughs his job done (won)
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bobotheclown
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by Black13 on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:11:36 PM AEST
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I told you this was an awesome write last night.
I stand by that firmly.
This was just wicked and void of hope. It engulfes the reader in a lack of hopeless apathy for life.
Brilliant Joel. |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by ShadowDaughter on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:17:20 PM AEST
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*applauds*
I second everything Jeff said, though I wasn't lucky enough to get to see it last night :P.
This is beautiful . . . powerful . . . poignant . . . vivid . . . emotionally emotionless (yeah, that sounds crazy, but I think you understand what I mean by it).
You can't read it without getting drawn in, without feeling the hope seep away . . . amazing write, Joel.
Bless, and what hope I've got left is hoping that may *you* someday find your hope . . .
--Nora |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:35:33 PM AEST
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excellent poem, wow, wow and wow again
pixie xx |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by dark_angel_of_poetry on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:41:39 PM AEST
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| Diddo everyone. Great job and continue writing. |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 05:06:30 PM AEST
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Joel. I think I have to agree with jeff on this. Its a great poem, so good in fact it leaves me feeling a little worthless. Nevertheless, I love how you wrote it. :) Thanks for sharing friend.
Lindsey |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 05:25:00 PM AEST
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i enjoyed this - well written - and well thought out.
Nice work |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 01:14:22 PM AEST
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joel this is excellent, filled with such vivid images and pain, the broken arms trailing behind you, wow and wow, what a line, hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by venkat on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 12:32:48 AM AEST
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Makes me breathless..this is very dense
and immense pool.so true in the darkest angle of life..
venkat |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 07:53:43 PM AEST
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| Joel you say my poetries good but dam this one blew me away, I knew you could write, but dam this is overflowing with some dam hardcore imagary, and I loved every bit of it. |
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Re: Pool of Apathy
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by Soulless on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 08:10:41 PM AEST
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wow!! you have my mouth wide open and Im screaming for more of your beautiful words. Filled with such grief and terror yet they taste so bitter sweet. Sadly I cant give you enough words to express how much I love this piece. It just tears me apart.
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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