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[title] => Treacherous tears
[time] => 2004-04-02 12:30:39
[hometext] => The poem says everything...
[bodytext] => As I was smiling today tears started sliding down my face,
I couldn’t stop them, they fell mutinously, leaving a wet trace
My friends were all shocked, they never thought I could cry,
Should have expected such a reaction, all I ever showed them was a lie
But how can I explain to them that that’s the true me?
I’m the ‘cold hearted’ one that laughs at a brutal horror scene
I’m the fool of the act, always cynical, showing the exuberant leader,
Always the one in control of the situation, on top of the ladder
I’m ashamed to admit that I fear the dark, cry, hope, and dream too,
Even more ashamed to say that what you’re reading is true…
In the end I just told them I got something irritating in my eyes,
And continued smiling, grinning, laughing... at myself…at my lies
[comments] => 29
[counter] => 532
[topic] => 48
[informant] => Necromant
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 66
[ratings] => 14
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
)
Treacherous tears
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Necromant
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Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 12:30:39 PM in AEST
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As I was smiling today tears started sliding down my face,
I couldn’t stop them, they fell mutinously, leaving a wet trace
My friends were all shocked, they never thought I could cry,
Should have expected such a reaction, all I ever showed them was a lie
But how can I explain to them that that’s the true me?
I’m the ‘cold hearted’ one that laughs at a brutal horror scene
I’m the fool of the act, always cynical, showing the exuberant leader,
Always the one in control of the situation, on top of the ladder
I’m ashamed to admit that I fear the dark, cry, hope, and dream too,
Even more ashamed to say that what you’re reading is true…
In the end I just told them I got something irritating in my eyes,
And continued smiling, grinning, laughing... at myself…at my lies
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Necromant
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2004-04-02 12:30:39]
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Re: Treacherous tears
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by LiquidChaos on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 12:34:42 PM AEST
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i know EXACTLY what you mean. putting on that facade of being the tough one...the life of the party. everyone needs to grieve though. but lying...that's gotten me in some trouble before. just be true to yourself and KEEP WRITING!
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by Kie on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 12:36:00 PM AEST
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| I have been guilty of the same thing. Don't berate yourself to much, we are all human. I really enjoyed this poem and the point you made. Kie |
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by Putteragain on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 01:31:07 PM AEST
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i think we are all guilty of this at one time good poetry i loved the harsh truth about it way to face yourself keep it up
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by Jupiter on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 02:11:53 PM AEST
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| I really think people should show true feeling like what you showed. You shouldn't it in. I learned that from my g/f. If you showed more feelings you'd feel different but in a good way. It would relieve some stress, that I also learned. But the poem is really good. Keep it up. -Steve- |
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by AnGeL_M on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 05:03:10 PM AEST
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I'm Sure We've All Been Guilty Of This At One Point In Our Life's....
After All We're Only Human And No One's Perfect In This Day And Time....
Great Write.... Keep Em Coming :-),,,,,,,,,,,LoVe,,,,AnGeL,,,,,,,,,,,, |
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Re: Treacherous tears
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by xoblondiebabix3 on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 02:09:29 AM AEST
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i know exactly how u feel.. most of my friends have never seen me cry.. i cry so much that it would be a huge shock to them, and i have lied to them about how i feel.. I loved how you put it! ur good @ writing! I Njoy ur poems!:)
kEEp it ^!
*much luv*
*XXoXXoXXo* |
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Re: Treacherous tears
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 11:27:47 PM AEST
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The message behind your great poem Anne
is one for all of us to ponder over.
I do the same thing.........and then I wonder?
I think it's because I feel it embarrasses my friend when I cry.
So most of the time I don't shed tears, just sigh!
Tis a great poem here Anne...I just loved ikt
consue |
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Re: Treacherous tears
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 01:00:10 PM AEST
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great write...reality isn't always pretty but it's still reality...i am not an advocate for brutal honesty but when we write from the heart (putting our egos aside) the words flow out just as they should...your honesty shines through from a heart that isn't quite as cold as you may think...sometime we are so hard on ourselves it is unreal...impressive piece.
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by loveisendless on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 11:09:09 PM AEST
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CARE,HOPE,& DREAMS OF LOVE . . . . . ARE
ALL ABOUT A TRUE & SPECIAL PERSON LIKE YOURSELF! DON'T HIDE YOURSELF TO THE WORLD,OR THAT PRETTY LITTLE SELF WILL NEVER SHOW!! BE YOURSELF & BRING THE WORLD A JOY,AFTER ALL IT'S
A BEAUTIFUL GIRL LIKE YOU THAT CAN FIND A WELL DESERVING BOY!!! BY THE WAY-GREAT POEM,BECAUSE IT WAS WRITTEN ABOUT THE REAL YOU-SOME
BODY SPECIAL!!!!
LOL-DAN!!!!! |
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 01:54:38 AM AEST
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| I can relate to this so well. There's always the fear of exposing weakness. Beautiful poem, you have expressed emotions so well. |
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by JennyFruFru on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 11:30:40 PM AEST
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| wow thats great!!! its hard to open up to your friends sometimes... and the people who claim to know you the best dont know a thing about you |
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by Hurretje on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:35:04 AM AEST
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Supreme vulnerability. Beautiful poem that shows another side of you.
*bows respectfully*
Keep it up!
Greetz,
Hur |
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by silent on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 09:14:56 AM AEST
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All i can say is that was one of the best poems on this subject i have ever read. I relate to this so very much, as i am sure others do to. Perfect..... You certainly have a deep understanding, so very true......Definately a bookmark on this one for me.
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 04:41:03 PM AEST
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Tears are not to be trusted, they say they will stay hidden but never do. Betrayers of a smile they are...
This was filled with such honesty,
Very, very well done my friend
Roses
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by JoAnne_Buchanan on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 09:27:09 PM AEST
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This is a beautiful writen poem with lot's of strong emotions..Super..
love
joanne buchanan |
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Re: Treacherous tears
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by Coaster on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 12:17:24 AM AEST
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Wow, great write! Loved the flow of the whole poem. Thanks a lot for posting this one up. Look foward to reading more of your writes!
Ryan |
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Re: Treacherous tears
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by venkat on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 01:49:34 AM AEST
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| you are very honest..I love this..venkat |
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 03:47:23 PM AEST
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This is so personal and telling. I have a friend like this. I really, really hurt this person (not intentionally), and I was never told until much, much later. I was so upset that I hadn't been told. It's so much better to be real.
Stitch |
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by arden on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 04:59:07 PM AEST
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so well written. the flow was awesome. i just love this poem. so powerful. well done.
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by ShadowDaughter on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 04:29:01 PM AEST
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Wow, Anne, this is fantastic . . . and rang so true. I know the feeling so well and you described it perfectly. Especially the
My friends were all shocked, they never thought I could cry,
Should have expected such a reaction, all I ever showed them was a lie
part. And the last two lines were solid gold. Beautiful, beautiful, job.
--Nora |
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by JoAnne_Buchanan on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 04:32:02 PM AEST
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Yes, we are all so human..This really speaks to my soul..Thank you sweet Ann..
love
joanne buchanan |
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th April 2004 @ 01:04:42 PM AEST
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I've been there also, this was an excellent poem on the subject.
wildej. |
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 22nd April 2004 @ 10:56:57 PM AEST
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oh anne, beautiful expression of feelings, ...never be ashamed of who you are, your heart is genuine, your poetry beautiful and brilliant, not many know me in r/l either, only through my words in poetry:) hugs n' love nessa x
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by mystERA on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 08:42:40 AM AEST
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Victor Hugo said:
"The supreme happiness of life is the conviction that we are
loved for ourselves."
u r anne :)
ellie x ;)
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by whisper-of-night on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 07:04:03 PM AEST
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| Why did you cry? And why did you not want to cry??..............hmmm Anne know what, when I was younger, I never allowed myself to cry, because I believed in a real man (though I wasn't even a man then!^-^) should shed blood but not tears...... but the sad thing is, now even when I want to cry to release my sorrow/stress/anger, I could NOT cry any more!! You may never experience it, but I can tell it, it feels aweful when you can not let it out when you really need to! To me, even crying is a luxury!....... So you know, do not surpress your feelings, there is nothing to be ashame of crying or showing your weakness, be the real you, and be proud of what you are, that is what most important...... okay I think I better quit winging now!^-^ |
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by yellow_sundragon on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 01:26:23 PM AEST
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Can't hide yourself forever...
Well written though
Jaime |
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 09:01:29 AM AEST
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| awwww, i hope you are ok. we all do this, dont worry, but just remember, you cant keep it all in forever..it wont help..if you wanna talk..let me know. great poem by the way. *hugs* phil xxx |
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by Avis_Nigra on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 03:39:54 PM AEST
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| everything has been said... maybe more. Just plain really really good. |
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 10:53:33 PM AEST
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| amazing write. very creative and written extremely well. |
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