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[aid] => mick
[title] => The Painted World
[time] => 2004-03-15 01:11:54
[hometext] => This is my world. No wonder people think I'm strange.
[bodytext] => Blessed be this crimson night
Where fire and ice collide into light
No secrets here, just a weary soul
I have lived and I will die tonight
Inside myself, where the blade sings.
"I know you're hurting and I hate what you've become. But as long as you insist on being lost, I can't help you."
Falling fast, light, high on air
Cue the melancholy music for my goodbye
My wings have ceased to protect me
I will fall, and I will burn and I
will touch the grouns in ashes.
"I have come to love your brokenness but not your absence, and I am still divided on whether to kill you or to embrace you..."
Raining down the silver spell of moonlight
Silence brings a sense of safety
I'm tired of being where I do not belong
The next journey is mine, to join my kindred...
...all is safe.
All is well.
I'm going now...
All is well.
"I would have died for you but time froze and I slipped. And that, that is what kills me."
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 287
[topic] => 13
[informant] => Avarice_Riot
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 15
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
)
The Painted World
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 01:11:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Blessed be this crimson night
Where fire and ice collide into light
No secrets here, just a weary soul
I have lived and I will die tonight
Inside myself, where the blade sings.
"I know you're hurting and I hate what you've become. But as long as you insist on being lost, I can't help you."
Falling fast, light, high on air
Cue the melancholy music for my goodbye
My wings have ceased to protect me
I will fall, and I will burn and I
will touch the grouns in ashes.
"I have come to love your brokenness but not your absence, and I am still divided on whether to kill you or to embrace you..."
Raining down the silver spell of moonlight
Silence brings a sense of safety
I'm tired of being where I do not belong
The next journey is mine, to join my kindred...
...all is safe.
All is well.
I'm going now...
All is well.
"I would have died for you but time froze and I slipped. And that, that is what kills me."
Copyright ©
Avarice_Riot
... [
2004-03-15 01:11:54]
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Re: The Painted World
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by lil_angel on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 01:36:21 AM AEST
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| Great job! |
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Re: The Painted World
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by venkat on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 02:09:46 AM AEST
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| Wonderful images..seems painted to perfection..venkat |
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Re: The Painted World
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by emystar on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 02:21:51 AM AEST
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Woo very sad but written well.
Good job.
luv, huggs,
emy
thank u for your comment on my poem. |
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Re: The Painted World
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by blueheart on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 03:41:18 AM AEST
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| Oo...very dark. Loved the metaphors. |
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Re: The Painted World
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 03:19:24 PM AEST
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Well done...Great imagery!!
Jenni |
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Re: The Painted World
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by kalika_vidya on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 05:46:03 AM AEST
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sad and beautiful..welldone..thanks for your great comment on my poem" A lesson..".:o)
Kalika_vidya |
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Re: The Painted World
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 05:54:33 AM AEST
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hello thought i'd give you a read ! i love this dark stuff can't do it myself for some reason,anyway to the point! an excellent write.
wildejohnny. |
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Re: The Painted World
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by Dina on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 11:21:29 AM AEST
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| I didn't think that you are strange even a bit. It is just that sometimes we feel strange feelings and I guess this is the way we should express them. Well Done. |
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Re: The Painted World
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by Coaster on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 12:54:03 PM AEST
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I love it man. Keep up the good work.
Ryan |
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Re: The Painted World
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th March 2004 @ 11:49:14 PM AEST
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| Awesome simply awesome.... |
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Re: The Painted World
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by arden on
Friday, 26th March 2004 @ 11:45:36 PM AEST
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Great imagery. this was so awesome. i loved it. well written keep it up.
Arden |
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Re: The Painted World
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 10:48:19 AM AEST
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And you know how to paint with words that are stronger than colors. Quite an achievement! This poem cuts like a razor blade!
Hur |
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Re: The Painted World
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 01:31:36 AM AEST
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I don't generally read dark poetry because basically I don't understand how life can be so dark, but I can say to you, my friend, that I am glad that you use words to to express your inner feelings because to actually do harm to yourself or extinguish your life light would be a terrible waste of a great poet and I am sure a deep caring person.
Rainbows to you,
Rita |
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