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Array ( [sid] => 29932 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Im The Mistake [time] => 2003-12-22 08:54:33 [hometext] => Parents.... Meh [bodytext] => Walking home today,
In the bitter cold winter,
I witnessed the tender touch,
Between parent and child,
I never experienced that,
Not from either of you.

What I did receive from you,
Were harsh words,
and unsupportive criticism,
You made me feel worthless,
You made my compassion fade,
I stopped believing because of you.

Should I of tried harder?
Were you ashamed of me?
I know I was the mistake,
Maybe I should of worked harder,
Maybe if I were more intelligent,
Or more talented,
You would be proud of me.

I apologise to you both,
For making you hate me,
Perhaps I could fix myself,
Would you prefer me to conform,
To the typical perfect child,
That I see everyday in the street?

I will, I promise, Do this for you,
I crave your parental love,
I will conform to your ideals,
It may not be too obvious,
But I love you both dearly,
I only wish you felt the same. [comments] => 5 [counter] => 290 [topic] => 48 [informant] => sweet-poison [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => EmotionalPoetry )

Im The Mistake

Contributed by sweet-poison on Monday, 22nd December 2003 @ 08:54:33 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

Walking home today,
In the bitter cold winter,
I witnessed the tender touch,
Between parent and child,
I never experienced that,
Not from either of you.

What I did receive from you,
Were harsh words,
and unsupportive criticism,
You made me feel worthless,
You made my compassion fade,
I stopped believing because of you.

Should I of tried harder?
Were you ashamed of me?
I know I was the mistake,
Maybe I should of worked harder,
Maybe if I were more intelligent,
Or more talented,
You would be proud of me.

I apologise to you both,
For making you hate me,
Perhaps I could fix myself,
Would you prefer me to conform,
To the typical perfect child,
That I see everyday in the street?

I will, I promise, Do this for you,
I crave your parental love,
I will conform to your ideals,
It may not be too obvious,
But I love you both dearly,
I only wish you felt the same.

Copyright © sweet-poison ... [ 2003-12-22 08:54:33]
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Re: Im The Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by Kie on Monday, 22nd December 2003 @ 10:30:11 AM AEST
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I am grabbing at kleenexes here. This touched me deeply and I just want to give you a big hug.
Everyone deserves to be loved and you should be loved unconditionally. If your parents don't love you its not you its them who has the problem...
I could just feel your pain and you did an amazing job writing this poem.

Kie

Re: Im The Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by loopylou on Monday, 22nd December 2003 @ 12:55:48 PM AEST
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man..this is so sad....and your parents have issues its not you dont blame yourself sweetie your not a mistake your a beutifu creation and your parents are idiots if they are oblivious to it!!! sending my love to you and a hug
lou

Re: Im The Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by jme on Monday, 22nd December 2003 @ 05:25:08 PM AEST
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You expressed the emotion of this write wonderfully. Great work.

Re: Im The Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by kidpoet_213 on Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 11:29:39 PM AEST
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OH... Lord... this reminds me so much of a friend of mine... her's and ur life seem to parallel... it's kinda eerie or spooky... wow! Like everyone's been telling you... it's not ur fault... ur not the blame... it's ur parents who have problems... they need to deal with them...
Great write... love the way u express urself... u do it so well...
~Donna~

Re: Im The Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by Sinned on Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 04:31:13 PM AEST
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Sweet_Poison

Isn't it strange children love their parents no matter what.
I have shared many of your feelings,but have long since moved on.
You dear one are not a Mistake---God doesn't make mistakes---He has purpose for you.
Thanks for writing and sharing this poem.

Sinned

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