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[title] => Breathe
[time] => 2016-09-26 07:49:45
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[bodytext] => The phone won/'/t ring
Everyone out of reach
All bodies are burning
The media can/'/t teach
Allegiance under flame
Heaven is just the sky
Daggers sold for fame
All the smiles are a lie
Stitched lips so pretty
Social beauty the best
Early latte committee
Infliction a path to test
Hurting you as a team
Paycheck the plateau
Riches bought a dream
Hell the new chateau
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Breathe
Contributed by
duff
on
Monday, 26th September 2016 @ 07:49:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The phone won/'/t ring
Everyone out of reach
All bodies are burning
The media can/'/t teach
Allegiance under flame
Heaven is just the sky
Daggers sold for fame
All the smiles are a lie
Stitched lips so pretty
Social beauty the best
Early latte committee
Infliction a path to test
Hurting you as a team
Paycheck the plateau
Riches bought a dream
Hell the new chateau
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2016-09-26 07:49:45]
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Re: Breathe
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by unknown_utopia on
Tuesday, 27th September 2016 @ 10:24:33 PM AEST
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oh great poem
well done. |
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Re: Breathe
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by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 27th September 2016 @ 10:39:03 PM AEST
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It probably doesn/'/t mean the same to you but when I read it I see society as a me-me world and no one cares about anybody anymore but themselves.
Great write!
James |
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Re: Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th September 2016 @ 01:36:00 AM AEST
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Angst calling, it leaves a message on the
land line phone, another, then another,
beep, beep, beep, went the tone.
Then, they got the cell, then they got to texting
And looking to the cell wondering what was
being written
Then, a few sat at the corner shop and talked
freely with a cup of java
in the morning mist
You know, the lovely morning mist
hey, you are alive, me too
feels good!
I like this / means a lot/ soothing flow
at the end.
Nice thought Senior Duff!!!
Peace! |
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Re: Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th September 2016 @ 01:49:01 AM AEST
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Angst calling, it leaves a message on the
land line phone, another, then another,
beep, beep, beep, went the tone.
Then, they got the cell, then they got to texting
And looking to the cell wondering what was
being written
Then, a few sat at the corner shop and talked
freely with a cup of java
in the morning mist
You know, the lovely morning mist
hey, you are alive, me too
feels good!
And then Randy walked in
the girl who is always stuck
in a book
walked in, and removed
a redwood tree needle from her
shoe and stuck it in her nose
and said hello...
hell yes, to be alive is good,
we all laughed, we laughed
Pete/'/s white hot latte foam
flown across the misty morning
room.
I like this / means a lot/ soothing flow
at the end.
Nice thought Senior Duff!!!
Peace! |
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Re: Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th September 2016 @ 01:55:17 AM AEST
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try it one more time...
Angst calling, it leaves a message on the
land line phone, another, then another,
beep, beep, beep, went the tone.
Then, they got the cell, then they got to texting
And looking to the cell wondering what was
being written
Then, a few sat at the corner shop and talked
freely with a cup of java
in the morning mist
You know, the lovely morning mist
hey, you are alive, me too
feels good!
And then Randy walked in
the girl who is always stuck
in a book
walked in, and removed
a redwood tree needle from her
shoe and stuck it in her nose
and said hello...
hell yes, to be alive is good,
we all laughed, we laughed
Pete//'//s white hot latte foam
flown from his nose across the misty morning
room, as the mariachi band played the song, deep,
in the heart or Texas.
I like this / means a lot/ soothing flow
at the end.
Nice thought Senior Duff!!! |
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Re: Breathe
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by FireStarter on
Friday, 30th September 2016 @ 11:17:26 PM AEST
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| Really liked your poem :) Thanks for commenting on mine |
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Re: Breathe
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 1st October 2016 @ 11:14:58 AM AEST
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Some great lines in here, with no wasted words.
Nice!
~Scorp |
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Re: Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th September 2020 @ 02:27:59 AM AEST
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| lines so evenly spaced and great poem |
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