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[aid] => mick
[title] => Life Going On.
[time] => 2010-12-23 08:07:03
[hometext] => Sticking with the winter theme, I noticed my footprints in the snow were the only ones this morning. Walking by the lake I was a where that I was truly alone but life was going on all around me.
[bodytext] => Snow blind and wind chilled
The mountain is an ice sculpture
On a stony plinth at the world's edge.
Not a single bird is flitting in the hedgerow,
No faraway sound of a dog barking,
The silence is total, the peace absolute.
Only the lights from distant farmhouses
Hint at a hidden warmth.
And only the path by the lake,
Where footprints have ruptured the snow,
Provide the proof of life going on.
The horizon is a colourless outcrop,
Heavy with winter woe.
The sky a vast grey ocean slumbering
Beneath a skin of subtle iced membrane.
Snow blistered and wind whipped I walk on
Rupturing the perfect snow,
Proof absolute, of life going on.
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[informant] => cashfan1
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[pollID] => 0
[score] => 23
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 0
[associated] =>
[topicname] => NaturePoetry
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Life Going On.
Contributed by
cashfan1
on
Thursday, 23rd December 2010 @ 08:07:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Snow blind and wind chilled
The mountain is an ice sculpture
On a stony plinth at the world's edge.
Not a single bird is flitting in the hedgerow,
No faraway sound of a dog barking,
The silence is total, the peace absolute.
Only the lights from distant farmhouses
Hint at a hidden warmth.
And only the path by the lake,
Where footprints have ruptured the snow,
Provide the proof of life going on.
The horizon is a colourless outcrop,
Heavy with winter woe.
The sky a vast grey ocean slumbering
Beneath a skin of subtle iced membrane.
Snow blistered and wind whipped I walk on
Rupturing the perfect snow,
Proof absolute, of life going on.
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2010-12-23 08:07:03]
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Re: Life Going On.
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by huwbeauty on
Thursday, 23rd December 2010 @ 09:44:26 AM AEST
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Nice one Dennis,I do look forward to reading your work it is unlike anything else on here,it's great to read about my favourite place,the welsh countryside,I know it's right outside my door but your writing just makes me want to explore it some more.
Nadolig llawen,
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Re: Life Going On.
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by poeticjestix on
Thursday, 23rd December 2010 @ 12:10:15 PM AEST
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| paints a picture of a place i wouldn't mind being right now. Trouble is, your foot prints are already there! |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by absyrtus on
Thursday, 23rd December 2010 @ 12:16:51 PM AEST
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| Very nice. I felt as if I were actually there while reading this. |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by emystar on
Thursday, 23rd December 2010 @ 03:55:50 PM AEST
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Beautiful word picture.
Well done.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by Rx1471 on
Thursday, 23rd December 2010 @ 05:48:25 PM AEST
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Personally I love the description you put into this poem. It really made me feel as though I was you in a way and I was the one walking by the lake.
I also think the subtle hint that even when your alone there will always be signs of life and that were not alone is a perfectly fitting theme.
Well done |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by wood on
Thursday, 23rd December 2010 @ 10:47:36 PM AEST
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| pretty nice imagery. takes me where you are. |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 12:26:10 AM AEST
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You have most definitely painted a wonderful scenic picture with your words!  |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by Voyager on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 10:01:03 AM AEST
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| Really enjoyed reading this....beautiful descriptions....well done! |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by unknown_utopia on
Friday, 24th December 2010 @ 07:59:53 PM AEST
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| love this winter vision flow |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by duff on
Monday, 27th December 2010 @ 03:58:26 PM AEST
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A stunningly beautiful piece of writing. Again, you take the reader to your created landscape and it's nothing short of pretty and a tranquility only found in your words. Fantastic writing my friend.
duff |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th January 2011 @ 10:57:45 PM AEST
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| Talented I must say felt like I saw the farm houes's and felt the wind on my face. The foot priints the only sign of life just sounds so peaceful. Structure a little wacky but this site is hard to really set up the poem just right other then that The poem is great |
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Re: Life Going On.
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by RyanS on
Saturday, 15th January 2011 @ 11:08:15 AM AEST
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| Youre not just desciptive, its how you describe it. Like everyone else says, it makes you feel like youre actually there but the words you use make it so much more real. |
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