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[sid] => 145729
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Divided We Fall
[time] => 2008-10-16 07:41:45
[hometext] => still writing it all out. sorry guys....
[bodytext] => uninvited hands
eight year old mind
plea for help
cried in vain
answered with embarrassment
middle of the schoolyard
uninvited hands
young girl
terrified and breathless
blacking out
praying for another moment
another place
uninvited hands
nineteen year old mind
confusing whirlwind
traumatic day
with a prayer said
for an angel forced unto me
burdens unbearable
uninvited hands
in the workplace
such an insult
when they called me that day
just to ask me
what kind of dress
i wear to work
uninvited hands
what was i to do
i can't tell you who
i can't tell you when
for i signed a paper
unwittingly to place it
neatly under a rug
like all good school girls
are asked to do
so here i am
telling my story
stripped down in front of you
vulnerable once again
sadly i am not so unique
yet we all lie
so divided
passing judgements
with our slithering tongues
bitter lies
cowardly betrayals
turning away
as our neighbor drowns
[comments] => 16
[counter] => 570
[topic] => 65
[informant] => karoody
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 35
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => toughstuff
)
Divided We Fall
Contributed by
karoody
on
Thursday, 16th October 2008 @ 07:41:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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uninvited hands
eight year old mind
plea for help
cried in vain
answered with embarrassment
middle of the schoolyard
uninvited hands
young girl
terrified and breathless
blacking out
praying for another moment
another place
uninvited hands
nineteen year old mind
confusing whirlwind
traumatic day
with a prayer said
for an angel forced unto me
burdens unbearable
uninvited hands
in the workplace
such an insult
when they called me that day
just to ask me
what kind of dress
i wear to work
uninvited hands
what was i to do
i can't tell you who
i can't tell you when
for i signed a paper
unwittingly to place it
neatly under a rug
like all good school girls
are asked to do
so here i am
telling my story
stripped down in front of you
vulnerable once again
sadly i am not so unique
yet we all lie
so divided
passing judgements
with our slithering tongues
bitter lies
cowardly betrayals
turning away
as our neighbor drowns
Copyright ©
karoody
... [
2008-10-16 07:41:45]
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by navydocny on
Thursday, 16th October 2008 @ 11:41:13 AM AEST
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This hurts to read....
Such pain....
Horrible torment and things none should experience much less bear witness to...
Thank you again for baring your soul Kara...
Steve |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 16th October 2008 @ 09:00:28 PM AEST
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Awww Hun, never apologise for what you write..what you feel.... This must have been painful for you to share..but you have shown such courage and such strength and you have come out a winner!!
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Crow on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 01:02:36 AM AEST
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to reveal so much, so open and honest ,
the frailty, us should be left to grow,not hardened by acts. Lane |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Anu on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 01:10:44 AM AEST
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Thought provoking write..!
And yeah..plz dont say negative about what you write..!
It's alwz good to give a vent...
An we are alwz here ..@ ypdc..! |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by NoSaint on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 07:24:24 AM AEST
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It is hard for us to let go of our pain ...but this is a start write it out and let it go on the wind...you are a beautiful spirit it is time for you to bloom for the world to see no matter what mud it has thrown at you...
Bloom with great beauty Lotus Flower
Shari |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 08:34:30 AM AEST
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No need to ever apologize.
Write as much as you need to! |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by yangdantien on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 02:26:37 PM AEST
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As united we stand for what's right and true let the pen lead you to wholeness and cleared feelings as you exorcise the rage and wrong from within. The Power of the Pen Compels You... Go with Goodness
Amen
Yang |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by wizard on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 08:16:14 PM AEST
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of course no apology is needed... the therapeutic aspect of poetry helps us all through the tough times, and helps to subside the tough memories...
i'm sorry for any pain you've felt... trust in this; you can find your own happy ending.
this is a heart wrenching piece, so much pain and terror ... certainly a difficult read, but so well written...
nicely done,
wiz |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by shelby on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 10:54:30 PM AEST
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Kara,
this is painful to read for many reasons.
We have talked on much..... This write brings such pain but I also see growth. Purge it sister purge it.
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 02:27:33 AM AEST
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Trying to comment on this is like trying to hold back a dam. It will eventually break. We have already discussed how this poem impacted me, Sweetness. But you're right, people need to know about this kind of ****** up ****!!!!!!!!
Like I said, this is what writing and poetry is all about. I can still feel the tightness in my chest and throat. Anything I say cannot do this write any justice. I just think it is amazing what courage, strength, and fortitude you have. I think that is what has impressed me since I discovered you here at ol ypdc.
Stunningly amazing!!!! Powerfully emotional and painful.
You are one brave woman and one special soul.
Loves ya!
Tim |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 02:35:55 AM AEST
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| In all that, I forgot to say that I also think you're an incredibly great poetess!!!!!!!!!! |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by outlawpoet on
Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 02:37:37 PM AEST
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| good write it was powerful keep your head up high joy comes in the morning |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Voice of the Silent on
Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 04:58:00 PM AEST
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I usually don't read long writes like this but i was pulled in
very sad write
Like i said i may not like many long write but i liked the way you expressed yourself
and never say sorry write until your hand falls off don't care what people think of how long it is or if they like it if you like it because you wrote it then i was worth writing it |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 21st October 2008 @ 09:06:07 PM AEST
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My Dearest KaraBear~
This is so sad hun. It pains my heart to
read what you have been through.
*hugs you tight* You are an incredible,
amazing soul Kara. You have come a
long way and continue to do so. Keep
writing it out sweetie it helps heal the
heart and yours is a most delicate &
beautiful one. I admire you and look up
to you my special soul friend. You can
never keep a good woman down. I loves
ya and I want you to know that you'll
always have a special place in my heart~
Here's to new beginnings & happy memories.
love ya girl~
your friend from across the blue,
dreamer |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd October 2008 @ 01:07:56 PM AEST
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Beautiful write amidst all of it's
contmptious painful emotions,
may you live to see a better day,
wishing you a gentle healing in
your heart, and keep up with
your imensely beautiful poetry.
thank you like wise for your
read and comment, most
appreciated . . .
Ben . . . |
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Re: Divided We Fall
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by deusdeira on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 01:51:13 AM AEST
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| Dark and sad, but with anger in it as well. I like the mix of emotion in this poem. I can feel your pain through this poem. Be strong and remember there is such a thing as rightful anger. |
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