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Array ( [sid] => 130719 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => These Unfinished Lines [time] => 2007-01-18 18:40:22 [hometext] => Please Comment. I'm giving this to my girlfriend for our one year anniversary. It's different than how I usually write, let me know what you think of this one. [bodytext] => I'll follow where you lead,
because I follow my heart.
The sky is a brilliant painter's canvas.
Purple and orange leap out onto your face.
And all I need is your hand.
The lands would drown,
if I shed from my desire.

Those glassy pearls shine this evening,
making lava from the rock.
Delicate and graceful your beauty is no undertone.
Let me feel your breath to let me know you're close.
Silently we scream, your gaze says it all.
Call me crazy but I find the fondest security in your smile.

The wind plays with your hair.
Doesn't it lift your spirit to have our feet on the ground?
The candles can burn to pools of wax.
And it all won't have to mean a thing,
with your head on my shoulder.

Come and listen close, I'll be your lullaby.
I wish I could say something as beautiful as you.
Your dress flows around your blinding aura.
The charming seduction of your presence
leaves me struck in awe,
"So this is what my soul looks like."

Unchain your fears, I'm right by your side.
Now you can finally breathe easily.
But I've got to let those alluring hazel eyes know
that these unfinished lines
mean so much more
than anything else that I could say. [comments] => 6 [counter] => 272 [topic] => 2 [informant] => moses [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LovePoetry )

These Unfinished Lines

Contributed by moses on Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 06:40:22 PM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry

I'll follow where you lead,
because I follow my heart.
The sky is a brilliant painter's canvas.
Purple and orange leap out onto your face.
And all I need is your hand.
The lands would drown,
if I shed from my desire.

Those glassy pearls shine this evening,
making lava from the rock.
Delicate and graceful your beauty is no undertone.
Let me feel your breath to let me know you're close.
Silently we scream, your gaze says it all.
Call me crazy but I find the fondest security in your smile.

The wind plays with your hair.
Doesn't it lift your spirit to have our feet on the ground?
The candles can burn to pools of wax.
And it all won't have to mean a thing,
with your head on my shoulder.

Come and listen close, I'll be your lullaby.
I wish I could say something as beautiful as you.
Your dress flows around your blinding aura.
The charming seduction of your presence
leaves me struck in awe,
"So this is what my soul looks like."

Unchain your fears, I'm right by your side.
Now you can finally breathe easily.
But I've got to let those alluring hazel eyes know
that these unfinished lines
mean so much more
than anything else that I could say.

Copyright Â© moses ... [ 2007-01-18 18:40:22]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: These Unfinished Lines (User Rating: 1 )
by Misunderstood_gurl on Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 06:57:10 PM AEST
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...wow. I loved this. I believe your girlfriend is going to love it also. Who couldn't? This poem tells just how much you love her and its a beautiful and heartfelt poem. You did an amazing job on this.

Re: These Unfinished Lines (User Rating: 1 )
by Eternal_Dreamer on Thursday, 18th January 2007 @ 07:08:31 PM AEST
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A big Happy Anniversary to you & your girlfriend my dear friend. She will love and cherish these beautiful words forever. Written so beautifully and from the depths of your heart. Well done and the best of wishes to you both.
love n hugs from ur friend,
sue m
PS thanx for the comment on my latest poem. I deeply appreciate it :-)

Re: These Unfinished Lines (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 12:42:37 AM AEST
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I'm sure she'll luv it.
Its sssoo sweet.
big smiles,
emy

Re: These Unfinished Lines (User Rating: 1 )
by Clarity_Rising on Friday, 19th January 2007 @ 02:31:48 PM AEST
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This poem is filled with romance.
I’m certain your girlfriend will love
it. Your words are overflowing with
tenderness and love. Excellent write!

Re: These Unfinished Lines (User Rating: 1 )
by ButchCorpuz on Saturday, 20th January 2007 @ 10:37:45 PM AEST
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Your girlfriend will surely fall in love with this one, apart from falling in love with you more.

Keep up the good work! I loved your poem!

Butch Corpuz

Re: These Unfinished Lines (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 11th June 2007 @ 06:11:51 AM AEST
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wow moses .. this was so painfully beautiful! There is a wealth
of romance, devotion and love in and around these lines,
my friend. How lovely. It really is too beautiful for words.

Oh, how I adore that title, for to me, expressing the love
you feel for the object of your affection is a never-ending
exercise. There never seems to exist adequate words
to really and truly do justice to the emotion. It's as if your
heart is exploding, with the most beautiful, yet
inarticulate emotions known to man. I applaud your
effort here, though. You did an amazing job of exacting
just that. Truly gorgeous, both in thought and words.

Sigh-inducing write!

~Breezy

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