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[sid] => 127513
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[aid] => mick
[title] => A Monster in Maple Village
[time] => 2006-10-28 09:45:42
[hometext] => Trying to improve my poetry - constructive criticism is welcome
[bodytext] => candidly talking , frantically walking suddenly points to a cause where has he been what has he seen could it be nothing at all could it be nothing at all could it somthing quite tall where has he been , what has he seen will it devour us all people are gawking , something is stalking something thats horrid and tall people amiss , though I insist I have seen nothing at all I have seen nothing at all nor is there puzzle to solve stuffing his corpse in under my porch I have seen nothing at all ---------------------------------------------------------------------- I am working on stressed and unstressed syllables and also alternating rhyming schemes to add variety but I don't know if I'm doing it ( syllables ) right. Truly , Doug [comments] => 2 [counter] => 156 [topic] => 13 [informant] => doug [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )
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