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Array ( [sid] => 126070 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Beaten Thoughts (Old Version) [time] => 2006-09-22 09:57:00 [hometext] => As title says, it's the old version of the poem. Which is better? You decide. [bodytext] => Your hand comes down me again
I can't feel my body
But I can hear it being hit
But I don't know why
I didn't do anything
If I wasn't so numb
I would cry
Am I really a mistake
If you could
Would you give me away
To someone else
Who could hit me all they wanted
Or an orphanage
Never to know love again
To be ridiculed
for just being me
Too bad
I guess I'll never be free. [comments] => 2 [counter] => 193 [topic] => 13 [informant] => flamingblade [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )
Beaten Thoughts (Old Version)

Contributed by flamingblade on Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 09:57:00 AM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry



Your hand comes down me again
I can't feel my body
But I can hear it being hit
But I don't know why
I didn't do anything
If I wasn't so numb
I would cry
Am I really a mistake
If you could
Would you give me away
To someone else
Who could hit me all they wanted
Or an orphanage
Never to know love again
To be ridiculed
for just being me
Too bad
I guess I'll never be free.




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Re: Beaten Thoughts (Old Version) (User Rating: 1 )
by LonelyPoet on Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 12:08:51 PM AEST
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this poem brought tears to my eyes..a good poem..but so very sad.


Re: Beaten Thoughts (Old Version) (User Rating: 1 )
by StormyNites on Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 01:10:40 PM AEST
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Really good poem..im sorry for what you must have gone through to write this but you've done a splendid job.




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