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Array ( [sid] => 105255 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => No more, just smile. [time] => 2005-09-07 19:35:44 [hometext] => Steven. I'll be fine. I just want you to be so very happy. [bodytext] => Please comment on this poem, it would mean alot to me. I went through alot when i wrote this. It's like a continuence to
**I'll be here.** Thank you.
____________________________________________________

no more just smile. no more just smile.
no more just ******* smile.
the words are blurring out. i cant see.
no more just smile. no more just smile.
smile please.
I have to make this ok. No more just smile.
Please take the pain away.
just smile. see through the tears.
push. and smile. let this be fake.
This cant be real. Just smile. just smile.
the pain will go away soon. just smile.
No dont leave me please dont leave me.
I cant be alone..
ugh. smile. just smile.
smile until you pretend your ok.
Smile just smile like everythings gunna be ok.
no more just smile. smile for me.
Smile for your sanity.
just whatever you think of, smile.
this is getting ridiculous.
Im the one that's useless...
but i'll smile.
My lips are even shaking now.
my nose is bubbly.
I cant talk without sounding like i've been sick for 200 years.
and my stomache aches.
Those are worse than anything.
You ask me questions..and i respond really fast
just so i can ask you the same thing.
I want to know everything about you.
I get shivers off and on.
I just got the worse one yet.
I'm stil fighting, you know?
...Look at that smile.

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No more, just smile.

Contributed by Lollypopxcore on Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 07:35:44 PM in AEST
Topic: InternetLove

Please comment on this poem, it would mean alot to me. I went through alot when i wrote this. It's like a continuence to
**I'll be here.** Thank you.
____________________________________________________

no more just smile. no more just smile.
no more just ******* smile.
the words are blurring out. i cant see.
no more just smile. no more just smile.
smile please.
I have to make this ok. No more just smile.
Please take the pain away.
just smile. see through the tears.
push. and smile. let this be fake.
This cant be real. Just smile. just smile.
the pain will go away soon. just smile.
No dont leave me please dont leave me.
I cant be alone..
ugh. smile. just smile.
smile until you pretend your ok.
Smile just smile like everythings gunna be ok.
no more just smile. smile for me.
Smile for your sanity.
just whatever you think of, smile.
this is getting ridiculous.
Im the one that's useless...
but i'll smile.
My lips are even shaking now.
my nose is bubbly.
I cant talk without sounding like i've been sick for 200 years.
and my stomache aches.
Those are worse than anything.
You ask me questions..and i respond really fast
just so i can ask you the same thing.
I want to know everything about you.
I get shivers off and on.
I just got the worse one yet.
I'm stil fighting, you know?
...Look at that smile.

Copyright © Lollypopxcore ... [ 2005-09-07 19:35:44]
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Re: No more, just smile. (User Rating: 1 )
by xxbreathlessx on Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 10:48:05 PM AEST
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i really liked this. the repetition is really good, it shows how desperately you need that smile and the end was great.

Re: No more, just smile. (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 02:33:23 AM AEST
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I agree with the above comment; I, too,
think the repetition portrayed just how desperately
you needed the smile..

Powerful write; specifically the ending.

*Sending little beads filled with smiles zooming
across cyberspace over yonder towards you*

~KayT

Re: No more, just smile. (User Rating: 1 )
by Wachumiri on Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 04:52:11 AM AEST
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Wow.... It's a very hard poem to read, it must have been very difficult to write. I'm sorry, I'm not sure for what, but I'm sorry. I pray that at least you got your smile.
Take care, and smile too.
David

Re: No more, just smile. (User Rating: 1 )
by loura on Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 07:24:43 PM AEST
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i don't know much abut poetry, i just enjoy reading and writing poems. so i can't say how the write is and stuff like that...but i can say that whilst reading it, this poem sunk in me...and even if i don't know how to explain it, i understand it...

loved it
loura

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